The entire class were given an image each and told to make up a story from the image, we then passed our story and our image to someone else and made up a story board based on what our class mate told us.
In this image there are two horses talking to each other (whispering), one about how heavy his passenger is and then talking about how they hate being there to carry heavy soldiers and that they wish they were free.
One horse refers to his wife as "his old lady" I chose this phrase because it's quite an old fashioned term and I wanted to make this sound as fitting with the war time as possible. I looked this up online and it's a phrase used a lot on the 40's.
When we talked about my story board I was told for a first draft it was too developed and seemed like I'd put too much effort into detail, so I made another, I think this new one has more detail as you can quite clearly see that the horses are now whispering.
I also had some guidance on how I should position the horses, I found two images online to use as examples and comparisons to demonstrate the guidance I gained.
This image to the left is a perfect example of how I was planning to depict the horses whispering, I thought since they are horses they could be talking like they do in films, English to the viewers, Horse to the on-screen characters.
Image found at: http://i.dailymail.co.uk/i/pix/2011/10/28/article-2054707-0E93EABB00000578-229_634x430.jpg
This is how Bec drew the horses afterwards and reminded me the point of horses whispering, is that they have to actually look like they are whispering, in the story-board above you can see the last image is the example he gave me.
As you can see I've made things much simpler and easier to understand, I have also taken Bec's advice and changed the positioning of the horses.
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